For those who have been curious to read portions of my book, here we go. I’d appreciate CONSTRUCTIVE help only. If you think there’s a problem, please be specific. I don’t want to stop doing this because a lot of people just want to say “This Sucks!” and leave it at that. Not helpful. If you think it’s good, tell me, if you think there are places where I could use some clarification, or it’s too wordy, or anything else tell me that too.
For my submariner friends out there, let me know if this sounds like something that could have happened in a sub. The tons of research I have to do in order to attempt to depict submarine culture is no match for your experience. Let me know if I got it right, wrong, or how to fix it.
This is a large excerpt from Chapter 2: Gateway to War. The Flier is now north of Australia, on her way to Lombok Strait, the dividing line from Allied to disputed waters. Al, off duty, is passing through the Mess Hall on his way back to his cabin, when he gets caught up in the conversation between two of Flier’s “plankowners” (these are men of a submarine’s original crew, the one that she was commissioned with). They end up telling the new hand, Elton Brubaker, 17 years old and on his first tour, about the time Flier grounded at Midway, over several hands of poker.
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